Monday 20 March 2017

Rubbery-locks

I enjoy this because I get to make up a story just like goldey-locks but mine is rubbery-locks.Next time I should add more images.


Rubbery-locks One morning,there was a big and scary girl name rubbery “actually her name is Ellie but the whole village called her rubbery because her hair is too rubbery like a rubber”.In the morning her parents were thinking about what they could do the their little girls hair,so they thought that their big and scary little girl should have a haircut.When rubbery heard them she ran as fast as she could,over the neighbor and all the way where lots of trees and birds. In the afternoon rubbery stopped and take a breath but all she sees is trees.In the night she cries when the moonlight comes,so she haff and haff and she scream out loud,and all the birds flew out.After she take a little bitty tiny nap,her tummy was so empty,so she took 5 or 10 step and she saw a house with long wings and muddy,so she sneaked in, and the first thing she saw is the fridge,she took one little look inside the fridge and she thought it’s like a miracle. When rubbery open the fridge door she saw mud and all sorts of yucky staff and she took a bite,but then she haff and haff and waked the people up inside the house wing.When rubbery look up she saw big legs coming down from the stairs,so she looked and looked and saw big arms and it’s green and dark green.Oh no!said the big scary orger”Hey you monkey get out of here” rubbery was so amazed so she ran but her hair got stuck in the fridge, she ran and thought maybe mum & dad is right that I need a haircut,so rubbery found her way home and went to the hairdresser and have a long haircut but now she’s worry about the orger.
 The end

2 comments:

  1. Kia ora shalom my name is irihapati you need to look at your work because some off it don't make sense

    ReplyDelete
  2. Hello Shalom,

    Awesome story. I love how you used Goldilocks, and changed it up. Maybe next time you try using practicing paragraphs?

    Prudence,
    Yaldhurst Model School

    ReplyDelete

Please structure your comments as follows:
Positive - Something done well
Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say
Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or Ask a question you want to know

Note: only a member of this blog may post a comment.